[Bards] more triolets

[Marie Adams]

You're welcome. Thanks for the poetry info!   Serena

On Mon, 23 Feb 2004, Haines, Paul wrote:

> Ah, you're quite right.  A typo on my part.  Thank you for pointing that
> out.  The triolet is a French form that gets its name from one line being
> repeated three times.  The poem consists of eight lines, generally in iambic
> tetrameter (I've seen some exceptions, but my dear teacher seems to wrap me
> on the hand when I stray from it. :P )  The rhyme scheme is:
> ABaAabAB.  The A line and the B line are repeated, while the a lines rhyme
> with the A line and the b line rhymes with the B line.  It's a very
> challenging poetic style because your essentially trying to convey the
> meaning through a very limiting structure.  I've written a couple one-off
> triolets and a couple poems using multiple triolets (like "A Last Request").
> When I get some adequate documentation written up, I'll post it for
> everyone.
>
> I should also send these poems to Bersi to add to the webpage.
>
> In service,
> Alden
>
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Marie Adams
> To: Ansteorran Bardic list
> Sent: 23/02/04 18:03
> Subject: Re: [Bards] more triolets
>
> Beautiful! I don't know anything about this poetry form, but the
> thoughts in the verses were lovely! Also, if I may say: you put "veil"
> in the next to last line, where you probably meant to put "shield".
> You may want to look at that.    Serena Dominicci
>
> On Sat, 21 Feb 2004, Haines, Paul wrote:
>
> > Greetings to the good bards of the list from a baby bard currently
> sailing
> > off the coast of Meridies.  I've had some time to work more triolets
> while
> > I've been at sea.  I completed one triolet and it inspired me enough
> to turn
> > it into a series which I title "A Last Request".  I may carry it out
> longer,
> > but I felt the four octets was a good point to share it with you.
> Comments
> > and critiques are always welcome.  Enjoy!
> >
> > ~Alden Drake
> >
> > A Last Request
> >
> > To see your lovely face once more,
> > Is all I ask before I leave.
> > Dear God in Heaven I implore
> > To see your lovely face once more.
> > The king has called, I go to war,
> > For me, I beg you not to grieve.
> > To see your lovely face once more,
> > Is all I ask before I leave.
> >
> > I pray look not upon my face
> > And see my eyes now filled with tears.
> > Remember me in all my grace
> > I pray look not upon my face.
> > Lift not, my lord, this veil of lace,
> > Which hides away my darkest fears
> > I pray look not upon my face
> > And see my eyes now filled with tears.
> >
> > Hide not the tears that freely flow
> > >From deep within your gentle heart,
> > For rain gives flowers strength to grow.
> > Hide not the tears that freely flow,
> > Upon your cheeks that all might know
> > The depth of love of those apart.
> > Hide not the tears that freely flow
> > >From deep within your gentle heart.
> >
> > Take with you then my tear-stained shield
> > And place upon my lips a kiss
> > For courage on the battlefield.
> > Take with you then my tear-stained shield,
> > A favor born of love to wield,
> > In battle far from those you miss.
> > Take with you then my tear-stained veil
> > And place upon my lips a kiss.
> >
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