[Bards] Well, it started with documentation....

ED Reese edreese at m7bedlam.com
Tue Jan 13 11:14:29 PST 2004

MessageYou are too kind! LOL!

In my bleary eyed state, I miscounted -- the opening line is 5-4-4, which
about half the stanzas (if that's proper to call them) are anyway!

But, by sticking to the "rules" I created for myself, I think I got
something that I can tweak and trim (that "royal brotherhood" stanza has GOT
to go!!! LOL) into a florid little war woo hoo.

Now, back to the documentation thing. If this were better, I might could
enter it into a competition. My documentation would be a concise two or
three paragraph introduction to Dante, his worldview, his influences, and
his contemporaries. Another paragraph would explain how he developed his own
allegorically based rhyme scheme (terze rime) for the Divine Comedy. The
summation would be me explaining the allegorical reasoning behind my
concocted form, and and flourishes I want to add.

If it was a multiple piece contest, I would probably also write and perform
pieces in actual terze rime and/or related styles that influenced him,
probably starting with presenting an actual period piece to demonstrate the
"continuity" of the worldview and stylistic approach. I think this works for
Dante and his contemporaries because innovation was so much a part of their
"style" Everyone was striving for a "unique" but still recognizable
"signature".  If I were to do the same sort of cluster presentation in, say,
Norse, the formats for my original pieces would follow the fairly strict
forms that were admired and emulated in that culture.

Is that sort of thing considered "acceptable" documentation?


PS Thanks for the encouragement.
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  That was great!

  Thanks for sharing,
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    [ED Reese]

    (c) 2004

     Call to Estrella

    Red arrow flying!

    Black Star Rising

    Over Blood Red Sun!

    Glory to be won!

    Deeds to be done

    On fields of dread!

    Falcon will be fed!

    War lies ahead

    For Blackstar's foe!

    Dealing death blow!

    Biting swords show

    Their strength, striking.

    Lancers charging!

    Heavy hooves drumming;

    Iron-shod attack!

    Foemen reel back!

    Bows sing, axes hack

    Shield punches jar!

    Heroes Stellar!

    On War's altar

    Tribute heaping!

    Steel blades clashing!

    Brave souls dying

    Of battle's fever.

    Foemen waver!

    Most sleep forever

    'Neath Death's dark wood.

    Royal brotherhood!

    Triumph in bud,

    Flow'ring ahead.

    Foemen have fled!

    The living dead,

    Cowards men shun.

    Falcon Flying!

    Black Star Rising

    Over Blood Red Sun!

    [ED Reese]

    I am wondering if I have heard "Black Star Rising Over Blood Red Sun"
somewhere else....

    Anyway, the discussion on documentation got me reminiscing about my
Italian Ren studies, especially the kind of numerological tricks the
Florentines liked to play. The opening line was something His Majesty said
at Coronation, when pledging Ansteorran support to Calontir (the Falcon
thrones) at Estrella War. The Blackstar Rising Over Blood Red Sun is how I
mentally "blazon" the Ansteorran Arms.

    I made up the rhyme scheme "in the style of Dante", so that there are
three lines in every verse, and instead of the nine syllables of terze rime
per line, I used four. I used four -- except for the five in the Blood Red
Sun line, which should actually read "o'er" instead of over. Yes, they used
those syllable shrinking things, too.

    The rhyme scheme is aab, bbc and so on. To give myself a tighter limit,
so I could get to what I wanted to say faster, the rhyme that changes in
each verse, rhymes with its numerical equivalent in the line "Blackstar
rising over blood red sun." The blood verse is somewhat off, for the simple
fact that not a lot rhymes with blood, but what the hey. I started this at
2:30 in the morning, because I couldn't get to sleep. :-)

    Feel free to lambaste away!

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