[Bards] Lines for Ravensfort
Alden Drake
alden_drake at sbcglobal.net
Tue Sep 18 13:29:05 PDT 2007
HEHE - Nah, I'm not sure I'd categorize it as a sonnet. While it has 14
lines, I'd want to keep it in iambic pentameter. Maybe I'll experiment
with an A-A-B-A-A-B, C-C-D-C-C-D, E-E sonnet though and see how it comes
out. :)
Alden
Beth Wolff wrote:
> HHMMMM??
>
> Shall we then save this newer form and cal it the "Aldenic Sonnet"??
>
> Elanor, just a bard
>
> */Alden Drake <alden_drake at sbcglobal.net>/* wrote:
>
> Thanks. I'm used to doing a couple edits on my poems, so these
> seem a bit rough to me, but I am pretty happy with how they turned
> out. I did manage one quick edit on the sonnet, and that made a
> difference.
>
> The poem for Countess Sara is kind of interesting. I took a poetic
> form used by Sir John Davies, from his acrostic collection "Hymnes
> to Astraea" and altered it slightly. For starters, I did away with
> the acrostic. Then I changed the meter from 8-8-7-8-7, 8-8-7-8-7,
> 8-8-7-8-8-7 to 8-8-7-8-8-7, 8-8-7-8-8-7, 8-8. I also changed the
> rhyme scheme from A-A-B-A-B, C-C-D-C-D, E-E-F-G-G-F to
> A-A-B-A-A-B, C-C-D-C-C-D, E-E. It shortens the poem by two lines,
> but I like how it reads a lot. I also like the Iambic tetrameter
> punctuated with the lines that drop a syllable. Very fun to write.
>
> Alden
>
>
> ----- Original Message ----
> From: Peter Schorn
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> Sent: Monday, September 17, 2007 6:37:00 PM
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>
> Alden, these are damned good!
>
> --Cadfan
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