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<div>Cecily wrote:</div>
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<blockquote type="cite" cite><font face="Arial" size="-1">This is the
policy, put up for reveiw that we cooks in Atenveldt may be living
under. Event bids need to go in 6 months before Kingdom level events.
Please, those of you who are experienced with Kingdom level feasts,
please respond with suggestions.</font></blockquote>
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<blockquote type="cite" cite><font face="Arial"
size="-1">Cecily</font></blockquote>
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<div>I don't live in Atenveldt. If I did, I would find this extremely
off-putting. A good deal of this reaction is not the content but the
bureaucratic language, which suggests to me an attitude on the part of
the kingdom officials which I don't like dealing with when I have to
deal with the government and would not choose to deal with in my free
time. For example:</div>
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ð Number Of Maximum Feasters: An
estimate of the expected<br>
number of feasters must be stated in the bid OR the maximum number<br>
of feasters who the feastocrat is willing to feed must be
stated. <br>
This number shall be used as the Number Of Maximum Feasters<br>
explained in the article, i.e., "A feast for [INSERT NUMBER] will
be</tt></blockquote>
<blockquote type="cite" cite><tt>offered..."</tt></blockquote>
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<div>Note the use of the passive voice everywhere it can be squeezed
in, mistakes in grammar (who for whom, for example),
"Maximum Feasters" (just how big is a maximum feaster?)...
And Atenveldt cooks may not object to being caled
"feastocrat", but I would.</div>
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<div>How about replacing that with something like:</div>
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<div>Maximum Number of Feasters: Your bid must include either an
estimate of how many people you expect or the largest number you are
willing to feed. This number will go into the event article...</div>
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<div>Do other people here find this easier to read or is it just
me?</div>
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<div>Elizabeth/Betty Cook</div>
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