[Bards] I fixed it.

[ED Reese]

Thank you. Much better, I would say.

HL Esther of Ennis Merth
(ED = Esther Della) ;-)
  -----Original Message-----
  From: bards-bounces at ansteorra.org [mailto:bards-bounces at ansteorra.org]On
Behalf Of Floyd Brigdon
  Sent: Tuesday, January 13, 2004 3:28 PM
  To: Ansteorran Bardic list
  Subject: Re: [Bards] I fixed it.


      Even better.
      Excellent, milord.

      Milo
    ----- Original Message -----
    From: ED Reese
    To: Ansteorran Bardic list
    Sent: Tuesday, January 13, 2004 3:25 PM
    Subject: [Bards] I fixed it.


    Try this. It's better. 5-4-5 rhyme scheme in the Florentine style.
Inspired by HRM Miguel at his Coronation.

    © 2004

    ED Reese



    Call to Estrella


    Red arrow flying!

    Black Star Rising

    over Blood Red Sun.



    Glory to be won!

    Deeds to be done

    on the fields of dread.



    Falcon will be fed!

    War lies ahead

    for the Black Star’s foe.



    Dealing the death blow!

    Foeman will know

    King’s swift sword striking!



    Lancers are charging!

    Hard hooves drumming;

    to iron-shod attack!



    Foemen reeling back!

    Bows sing, axes hack

    brave souls are dying.



    Falcon is flying!

    Black Star rising

    over Blood Red Sun.



    FYI, Blood Red Sun starts in caps for the same reason Falcon and Black
Star are.



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