[Bards] I fixed it.
Lady Simone
simone at elfsea.net
Tue Jan 13 16:41:02 PST 2004
It's even great in the rewrite.
Thanks
Lady (Simone) Muirenn ingen Senáin uí Dúnlaing
2nd Rose of FalconRose Southern Keep, Ansteorra
----- Original Message -----
From: ED Reese
To: Ansteorran Bardic list
Sent: Tuesday, January 13, 2004 3:25 PM
Subject: [Bards] I fixed it.
Try this. It's better. 5-4-5 rhyme scheme in the Florentine style. Inspired by HRM Miguel at his Coronation.
© 2004
ED Reese
Call to Estrella
Red arrow flying!
Black Star Rising
over Blood Red Sun.
Glory to be won!
Deeds to be done
on the fields of dread.
Falcon will be fed!
War lies ahead
for the Black Star's foe.
Dealing the death blow!
Foeman will know
King's swift sword striking!
Lancers are charging!
Hard hooves drumming;
to iron-shod attack!
Foemen reeling back!
Bows sing, axes hack
brave souls are dying.
Falcon is flying!
Black Star rising
over Blood Red Sun.
FYI, Blood Red Sun starts in caps for the same reason Falcon and Black Star are.
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