[Bards] I fixed it.
ED Reese
edreese at m7bedlam.com
Tue Jan 13 13:35:22 PST 2004
Thank you. Much better, I would say.
HL Esther of Ennis Merth
(ED = Esther Della) ;-)
-----Original Message-----
From: bards-bounces at ansteorra.org [mailto:bards-bounces at ansteorra.org]On
Behalf Of Floyd Brigdon
Sent: Tuesday, January 13, 2004 3:28 PM
To: Ansteorran Bardic list
Subject: Re: [Bards] I fixed it.
Even better.
Excellent, milord.
Milo
----- Original Message -----
From: ED Reese
To: Ansteorran Bardic list
Sent: Tuesday, January 13, 2004 3:25 PM
Subject: [Bards] I fixed it.
Try this. It's better. 5-4-5 rhyme scheme in the Florentine style.
Inspired by HRM Miguel at his Coronation.
© 2004
ED Reese
Call to Estrella
Red arrow flying!
Black Star Rising
over Blood Red Sun.
Glory to be won!
Deeds to be done
on the fields of dread.
Falcon will be fed!
War lies ahead
for the Black Stars foe.
Dealing the death blow!
Foeman will know
Kings swift sword striking!
Lancers are charging!
Hard hooves drumming;
to iron-shod attack!
Foemen reeling back!
Bows sing, axes hack
brave souls are dying.
Falcon is flying!
Black Star rising
over Blood Red Sun.
FYI, Blood Red Sun starts in caps for the same reason Falcon and Black
Star are.
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