[Bards] Lines for Ravensfort

[Alden Drake]

HEHE - Nah, I'm not sure I'd categorize it as a sonnet.  While it has 14 
lines, I'd want to keep it in iambic pentameter.  Maybe I'll experiment 
with an A-A-B-A-A-B, C-C-D-C-C-D, E-E sonnet though and see how it comes 
out. :)

Alden

Beth Wolff wrote:
> HHMMMM??
>  
> Shall we then save this newer form and cal it the "Aldenic Sonnet"??
>  
> Elanor, just a bard
>
> */Alden Drake <alden_drake at sbcglobal.net>/* wrote:
>
>     Thanks. I'm used to doing a couple edits on my poems, so these
>     seem a bit rough to me, but I am pretty happy with how they turned
>     out. I did manage one quick edit on the sonnet, and that made a
>     difference.
>
>     The poem for Countess Sara is kind of interesting. I took a poetic
>     form used by Sir John Davies, from his acrostic collection "Hymnes
>     to Astraea" and altered it slightly. For starters, I did away with
>     the acrostic. Then I changed the meter from 8-8-7-8-7, 8-8-7-8-7,
>     8-8-7-8-8-7 to 8-8-7-8-8-7, 8-8-7-8-8-7, 8-8. I also changed the
>     rhyme scheme from A-A-B-A-B, C-C-D-C-D, E-E-F-G-G-F to
>     A-A-B-A-A-B, C-C-D-C-C-D, E-E. It shortens the poem by two lines,
>     but I like how it reads a lot. I also like the Iambic tetrameter
>     punctuated with the lines that drop a syllable. Very fun to write.
>
>     Alden
>
>
>     ----- Original Message ----
>     From: Peter Schorn
>     To: bards at lists.ansteorra.org
>     Sent: Monday, September 17, 2007 6:37:00 PM
>     Subject: [Bards] Lines for Ravensfort
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>
>     Alden, these are damned good!
>
>     --Cadfan
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